For this blog post, I decided to critique Jaybiz’s (Jayson) post How to Get Goulding Singing to Good Ole Soca and Melswimsgood (Melvin) post 5 Song Music Mashup (Girl).
For Jayson’s post, I liked the fact that he used two songs from two different genres and tried to mash them up, rather than using two songs from the same genre, which is more typical. The two songs that he used was Too Real and I Need Your Love. I liked the fact that he used Too Real, because as a soca lover, it was surprising to me that he mashed that song with I Need Your Love, which is a more slower beat. His mashup was very unique. At first when I listened to the audio, I was thinking that it sounded a little weird, but after reading his post, I finally understood his reason behind what he was doing. It was very creative of him. I loved the fact that he included very precise details about his project and the different steps he took when doing it.
For Melvin’s post, I liked how he decided to do a mashup of the word “Girl” rather than doing a mash up of two or more songs together, which is what most students did. It was a very creative idea. I liked that he included links to all the songs that he used so that the viewer know’s the names of the song, and could listen to each song so that they know exactly what parts of the songs he decided to use in his audio assignment. However, the only thing that I would have liked to see was his steps that he took in completing the project. I felt as though his post could have been a little more detailed, just so that the reader has a better understanding of all the hard work he had to do to complete his project.
Both Melvin and Jayson did an excellent job on their assignments! They both did mashups, that’s why I decided to critique the two and compare them. While Jayson wanted to just mash two different genre’s together, Melvin just simply mashed one word from different genres of song together. Even though Jayson used Mixxx and Melvin used Audacity, both assignments came out to be a success! Great Job Guys!
The two audio assignments i choosed to do a critique on is Merlo Service by tshauna92 and it’s alive, it aliveee the poem is alive by jaybiz. I found both of these post really interesting because they both mad many similarities as well as many differences.
Merlo Service by tshauna92 was really interesting because it was extremely detailed. The author not only included clips for their time working on it by they also gave step by step on how they completed this project. It allowed me as the reader to understand how they are learning about this information. I also learned alot about Audacity with this blog post because for my projects i use ProTools over Audacity just because they gave a lot of information about the mixing board and its capabilities. This post also allowed me to find out more information of some things that I’m more interested in because the author hyper linked a lot of information that a reader like myself wouldn’t know about. Over all i loved this blog posts because it included pictured, videos and it gave a very detailed outline of how their project went.
It’s alive, it’s aliveee the poem is alivee by jaybiz was really interesting as well as unusual. The title was the first thing that caught my attention and made me want to read more about it. The poem over all was a great choice for this assignment because it allowed the user to play around more with it.When listening to it the author should have stopped recording a little earlier because there was a slight pause at the end. Over all i enjoyed this blog post because it was fun to listen to and the author also provided a video on how to use Audacity which will help alot of readers like myself
*** Both of these posts were really interesting as well as different. They both had many similarities such as they both used Audacity and they both hyper linked to different sites which allowed the reader to get more information. They were also different because both assignments were on different things. tshauna92 assignment was a service learning and jaybiz assignment was an audio assignment.They were different because tshauna included more details because it was somewhat as a field trip where you learn tons of information rather than jaybiz where the author got a chance to experiment with a different form of a program. Both of these blog post were unusual and similar in their own ways. Great job to both of these authors!!!***
So for my last critique I decided to look at two projects. One done by danny36 and the other by affinitysoup which was a group project done with two other members as a commercial for our radio show.
First let me say to danny36, are you holding back some talent on us man. Who would have guessed we had a real musician in our sound class, I wonder who else is hiding talent. I feel as though your post could have been a level two and be more in depth. I appreciate that you did two separate recordings and honestly I wouldn’t have known you did two separate recordings if you didn’t state that. I think it would be great to know what microphone you used to for the recordings. Was it the same for the voice and the guitar, what settings did you use ? For me I’m hearing a better reproduction of the guitar than the voice, and you said you did some editing in Audacity but I don’t know what you did exactly. But what ever you did it came out great. Good job on the project.
Now to affinitysoup. I want to congratulate you guys for coming together and actually deciding to complete a project. You guys sound good relaxed and rehearsed which is good. However the background music that you used was clever to try to mask the outside noise from the recording but it was very distracting. I like that you experimented and used the wah wah effect, but I don’t think it necessarily helped in this case, because it then sounds like the music is going from one ear to the next which then becomes more annoying with the flanging. But I liked that you guys each had a part in the recording and it came out as though there wasn’t a script, besides hearing the turning of the paper, there were no unnecessary pauses. Overall I think you guys did a good job on coming together.
It is that time again to judge two people on how they do and what they need to do to get better or if they need to get better. I know I am supposed to judge on people post but oh well. The two people that is going to get judged by Moi is jaybiz and melswimsgood.
The first person I think I am going to start with is (drum rolls please) melswimsgood. The post I decided to do a critique on Phenomenal Women. For this assignment you did Over-Dramatic Reading where you have to find a song, poem, short story or anything and read it aloud and be over dramatic with it. You chose to do Maya Angelou and I think that is great because she is a great inspiration. The poem you chose was excellent because everybody should know that: it is one of the greatest poem. I listened to your audio and it was great. I know the assignment said be creative,make it your own and I am guessing your creative way was rapping the poem in your own way and do not get me wrong it was nice but it was not over dramatic the way I thought it would be and if it was I think it would have been better. Also, I like how you put the words from the poem on your post for people to follow it. In general, it was really good.
I have to laugh at this next person because I find his work interesting. So put your hand together for the next person jaybiz. The post I decided to do is: It’s ALLIVVEE it’s aliiivvee the poem is alive!. For this assignment you did Onomatopoeias! where you have to tell a joke or create a longer comedy skit with sound effects. I checked out the website you provide for where you got the poem and it is fascinating. What you said in your post about finding the sounds would be a challenge to find but it don’t look like it was because the sounds you provided went well with the poem. The only thing I would say is you could have sound a little more energetic.
I like both the post. It was nice hearing the audio as well. I can not wait to see what else y’all have in store for the rest of the remaining time.
This post is a critique, I wanted to talk about a few things about the similar blog post of both affinitysoup and ally4eva.
As far as the Beauty is Life post by affinitysoup I thought it was really interesting when I heard it and I like how you deepen the meaning of beauty, that was very creative. Also, the poem is great in itself and seems to have a deep meaning to it, moreover I liked how this poem reaches out and shows how beauty is not what is solely on the outside of an individual and about how this woman realizes the theme of her beauty. However, I felt more could have been added to the audio content, perhaps an in depth reason why beauty is all that you say it is and what not, maybe elaborate on this subject a bit more. In addition, the summary shortly after the poem caught my attention and as I read the poem I felt a connection. connection was as if I could feel for the woman and how she perceives beauty based on how society shaped it. Overall this was a great post and was very creative.
Finally, ally4eva, I really liked your Let her go – Passenger blog and I love the song that you choose, “Let her go by passenger” is one of my favorite tunes. A great job was done, reading the lyrics, however, I do see what you mean by it being difficult to pull of a happy singing tone of voice with this song. This song’s lyrical content and instrumental is sad, but the artist doesn’t really sound too sad himself, I guess the beat and lyrics to the song give it a sad feel. This may also be a reason why trying to sound happy wasn’t working to well for you. Anyone who knows this song would understand that. Nonetheless, this was a very creative blog post. Both blogs were very poetic in content and similar .
This critique is on an assignment that I found interesting by jaybiz an
First of all I really like the assignment Here is How You Rock out Till to Tomorrow done by jaybiz, and I came across it in the assignment bank. I like the black eyed peas song that you included in the mash up as it’s one of my favorites. I attempted this assignment earlier before but did not succeed with it as I could not find the right tracks to use. As you said in your blog post “the challenge for me was not knowing the song” well, this was the problem for me. I noticed that two of the songs you choose to use were very old school. Also the transition from the “Rock and Roll is Here to Stay” into the “Stay by Rihanna” did not go right. But I like the songs you choose, they where interesting, however, I believe choosing from songs that where more recent and popular would have made the assignment better. Moreover, more people viewing your blog may relate and enjoy the content if the songs were more recent. But this may have also made the assignment much more challenging. In addition, I think you did a great job with the mix up, it sounds great and the songs that you have chosen blend in perfectly.
As for tshauna92, I thought you did a great job on your Lyrical Tag blog post and i liked the songs that you have chosen. One thing I noticed different from jaybiz’s post was that your songs were relatively more recent. Another thing I noticed was the transition from the first to second song seemed out of proportion, the first song was cut off a little too short. overall both of the assignments were done very well :D!!
Here’s my second critique blog post. This time around we have two new posts to critique. First one up is…(drum roll)…jaybiz with “How to Get Goulding Singing to Good Ole Soca”. To start things off I thought it was a good job that you took a second approach at doing the assignment, the Music Mashup. Improvement is the cousin of practice. I listened to the the finished result and it was for a lack of better words very very impressive. When it comes to mixing music I have prior experience with some DJ equipment and I must say the project was very clean and edited well. The tempo of Goulding’s voice went along with the pace of the soca beat. I found no problem with the finished project. Adding the pictures during the explanation was a good job too.As for the blog post composition, it also met the standards of the level three post. You gave ample explanation behind the process of doing your project. I had a clear understanding of what you did. What amazes me is how it took you 28 attempts. HOW IN THE WORLD does it take you 28 attempts? That must have been very frustrating. Overall, the verdict is two thumbs up great project man.
Now onto the second assignment which belongs to melswimsgood, “Phenomenal Women… Over Dramatic Reading”. We’ll begin by looking at the final project. The recording of your voice was pretty clear. I felt like it wasn’t that much of over dramatic. In fact, your voice sounded more like a rapper’s voice. Maybe it’s because of your accent but I was waiting for you to start spitting instead of reading the lyrics.
For the post itself I believe you could’ve added a few more things to meet the requirements of the level one blod post. You didn’t include the hyperlink to the assignment. As for the recording there could’ve been a little more explanation behind what program you used to complete the project and if you did any editing to the voice recording. Overall there’s room for improvement but good job choosing a Maya Angelou. She’s a very influential woman, a Phenomenal Woman. And the verdict is…good job on the recording. Both assignments were good and I look forward to more song mixes and readings. Keep up the good work!
This post is going to be a critique of two audio projects. On done by danny36 and the other by tshauna92. I chose to evaluate these two projects since I did similar projects.
First I will talk about the movie dialogue mashup by danny36. I liked the assignment which you chose, kudos on using the Matrix, and also on using Her. I haven’t seen Her as yet but I hear its good. Also the title could have been a little more creative as well. Anyways I believe I get the idea of the conversation you were trying to illustrate by putting them together, these two different movie dialogues. However I feel as though it was a bit abrupt, since after Morpheus tells Theodore (from Her) that “Your hair has changed, your appearance now is what we call a residual self image, it is a mental projection of your digital self.” To me it feels like there could have or rather should have been a reply from Theodore to Morpheus. Also I’m not sure you needed to necessarily needed to write out the dialogues from the movies, since they are both pretty clear audibly and you have a “To” written for Morpheus which I didn’t hear in the audio as well. Other than that I liked that you tried to use Audacity a little further and it came out good, it didn’t sound rush, and pushed together. There is enough breathing room and it sounds as though they could actually be in the same room, whereas one clip didn’t drown out the next. I wish you could have worked with “300” and “Kick Ass”, I like those movies, and now you have me thinking.
Now on to tshauna92, I firstly like the layout of your post and I’m actually a little jealous of the layout with the pictures compared to mine, I could have used those. I think it was a great idea to not only show the lyrics but to highlight them as you did. First I think its good that you attempted this project also, it isn’t always easy finding songs that you can match like this. For your audio I think it was a good lyrical connection to create a story, by listening and reading the lyrics, and it makes sense to me along with your description of each artist or group you chose. What was the first thing I saw was the difference in peaks in your sound wave before I listened to. So it was kind of difficult to listen closely between the first and the second song, shifting from one song that is louder to one that is relatively quieter, so I couldn’t really hear the lyrics well enough until about the 5th time that I listened to it. The reverse happens again between the second and third song where you placed a song with a lower volume before a song with a louder volume. So this transition is so sudden in that it also has the instrumentals accompanying it as well. The first and third song could have had their gain lowered to compensate for the second song, so that you can hear the transition. The transition from the third to fourth song is a little more tolerable since it is understandable and you have some breathing room in between the songs. The transition between the fourth and fifth songs is workable although part of the Mario lyrics get that thrown in with the N’Sync lyrics. The ending als would have been better in my opinion if you had let that harmony of the song play out without cutting it short, or getting the following lyrics from the song in the audio clip.
After looking through many of the audio assignments, one of the audio assignments that i found really interesting was the Mix it, Cut it ,Fix it, Audition it by KC90. While looking through the post i learned a lot about Adobe Audition because it was a program that i didn’t have any experience with.One of the things i loved about the post was how the writer described using the program step by step and how to change the audio. They also described how the user would select a file and how to mix different tracks on the same program.
Another audio blog post that i found really interesting was by the writer Stephanie3393 and her blog post titled “A bed of clouds” The audio assignment looked as if she had a lot of fun and it also thought me more about the ZoomH2N recorder which i went on to used for different audio assignments. I also loved the poem and how she linked to it,which allows the reader to read more different poems from the reader.I also loved the meaning behind the poem.
These two writers thought me a lot about different programs and recorders and how i could improvise them into my upcoming projects. One of the things i loved about KC90’s blog post was the step by step process of how the program was used. The only thing i would change about this blog post is putting a sample audio of how they actually used it or a small mix of a song they used with Adobe Audition. I really enjoyed Stephanie’s project because i learned about a recorder and how to used it for my different projects and i also loved how she gave a sample audio of herself recording a poem on the recorder which was he ZoomH2N Recorder. The only thing i would advise her to change in her post is the recording because she sounded a little mono toned, which she knows and said she will improve in her next recordings.! Both presentations were great and i look forward to reading more posts from these two writers!!
Adobe Audition H2N Recorder
I am doing my critique on khalil’s ”Luncheon noise” . Overall Khalil’s project was very informative because his post told me a lot that I wanted to know . it was very direct and to the point . The only thing I suggest for a post like this would be to break up the information you have put forth into a paragraph structure rather than putting everything together. another Thing I noticed is that you didn’t really evaluate on how to use the recording device . Sometimes when i post I like to put down any problems I might have which in turn enlightens my classmates on devices and how they can learn from my mistakes. A simple sound cloud link or even some pictures of the recorder and its pieces would have sufficed .
Pictures like this can really inform the viewer on what the components and buttons on their device can really do. i know because it has helped me once before . The sound however was very descriptive of a lunch room surrounding as you explained . I heard the sound of the inhabitants as well as the man making the food . Good Job Overall
now Stephanie went with a different approach and went outdoors for her sounds .
Her recorder ( the Zoom h2n Handy recorder ) has a built in mic which is why she didn’t have to use an external piece. Both her and khalil’s recording sound pretty similar in recording which is a fact i’m not disputing but the presentation of the blog is what I wanted to compare . The blog started with an open soundcloud link as well as a intricate description of 3 things :
1. her recorder
2. The components of the device
3. And her approach as far as sample rate and format .
As I said before both parties did a great job as far as sound and what they were trying to show but the overall post differed in description and understanding . great job to both of you and these are steps that i even consider when I view any of my classmates post . Keep up the great work .